Recently, as some of you know, I've been working to complete my Air Force ROTC scholarship application. There is but one writing section on it that I think may be able to use some rewording or improvements in vocabulary, as I'm not the best writer. I would highly appreciate it if anyone on here (who is a decent writer) could take a look at these two 'personal statements' and tell me what they think and/or how they could use improvements.
I only have six lines to hand write the both of these, so they're very short - (which is why I'd like them to be as good as possible). Yes, I'm aware they are somewhat cheesy, but that's kind of how they have to be.
"Why do you want to be an Air Force officer?"
-I would like to become an Air Force officer to serve our country and to fly the world's best aircraft. I have had a strong interest in aviation since a young age, so joining the Air Force to serve The United States while exercising that interest is an ideal path for me to take.
"What can you offer The United States Air Force?"
-I can offer the United States Air Force a variety of attributes. Most importantly, I can offer dedication and a strong desire to meet goals. I offer a well rounded personality with leadership skills and the ability to work effectively in a variety of different areas.
I'm not crazy about the last one and how much I use the word offer, but I can't really find anything to replace it with.
Keep in mind that these can't be any longer than they already are.
Thanks in advance for any help!